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War Zone 1

Postby Joshua8128 » Thu Nov 27, 2008 8:19 pm

You are walking in town. BOOM Some one next to you dies! What is going on!?!!?!?? The Russians are attacking!
You need to take a desert eagle and make it through a 3 map place to get to the mid base! There, they give you health and guns. Then, back to war! Go through to get back home! Then, you win!
Please, this is an original so please don't copy story line. This is taking place in about 1980's.
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Re: War Zone 1

Postby C0c1 » Thu Nov 27, 2008 8:22 pm

ok so its a short game? Can you give more detail/screens?
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Re: War Zone 1

Postby Joshua8128 » Fri Nov 28, 2008 11:15 am

um Ill try...
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Re: War Zone 1

Postby Neto » Fri Nov 28, 2008 3:56 pm

oh cmon! it's not THAT original, I'd say it's very cold warish cliche :P you should make something more unique to your game

any screenies?

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Re: War Zone 1

Postby MIV » Sun Nov 30, 2008 2:03 am

Joshua8128 wrote:You are walking in town. BOOM Some one next to you dies! What is going on!?!!?!?? The Russians are attacking!
You need to take a desert eagle and make it through a 3 map place to get to the mid base! There, they give you health and guns. Then, back to war! Go through to get back home! Then, you win!
Please, this is an original so please don't copy story line. This is taking place in about 1980's.

To be frank, the storyline is VERY VERY cheesy.
It's like... OMG Russians! I'll take my desert eagle, go back to base, go to war, then go home and yay! I win.
My response was: What. The. Hell.
Okay, here's a tip for writing storylines. Put yourself in the character's shoes. Add some dramatic effects and twists in the storyline to make it less cliched.
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Re: War Zone 1

Postby Wolf mpg » Wed Dec 03, 2008 7:27 pm

I agrre with all of them. i really didn't even get the storyline. i know its like your first game and all but next time give ita plot you can understand. i suggest to learn a little more about once branches and scripting for further games
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Re: War Zone 1

Postby MIV » Thu Dec 04, 2008 12:12 am

Add more detail. No screenshots and a cheesy storyline (to be frank) doesn't say much about your game.
And in a synopsis of a game, you don't say 'You win!' Let them find out how to win themselves; you're making it seem like your game is too easy.
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